Recrafting using Show not Tell !
Her face turned red !She walked while stomping her she slammed her door and sat on her bed.
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Tears plummeted down to her sheets while she hid under her duvet
His eyes were as big as saucers !He was flossing & jumping with joy high fiving everyone he saw.
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Happy tears rolled down his face while he was watching a happy movie.
My legs were tired !My legs were trembling I was about to collapse with exhaustion.
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I stopped at half point to rest my aching legs if I didn't I think they fall off.
The man walked down the road !The man jogged to speedway wondering if he missed the race.
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The man stumbled home his eyes swelling up with tears. 😢
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